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Old 07-27-2010, 05:24 PM   #51 (permalink)
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Default A new song finally!!!!

I had no inspiration for a while until now!!!

Memories of You

I must confess this to you
No one can see right through me except you
The only reason I hide myself,
I am not myself
I want to forget all I know
No, wait, I don't

I've kept secret all we used to share
I'm afraid to lose (to lose)
I've tried to hide it all from you
I'm afraid to lose my memories of you (memories of you)

I must confess this to you
I can't let go of love or you
I can't find myself in the dark
I keep waiting for the dawn
All my sorrow,
I won't let it make me shallow

I've kept secret all we used to share
I'm afraid to lose (to lose)
I've tried to hide it all from you
I'm afraid to lose my memories of you (memories of you)

I can't let go of these memories
I've lost so much
And your smile in my mind
Imagining your touch
I know the difference between delusions and memories

I've kept secret all we used to share
I'm afraid to lose (to lose)
I've tried to hide it all from you
I'm afraid to lose
To lose my memories
My memories of
Memories of you
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Old 07-28-2010, 11:48 AM   #52 (permalink)
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Nice, def something that sounds good and has a good flow.
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Old 07-28-2010, 12:14 PM   #53 (permalink)
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very nice, maybe you could record a demo?


in the meantime you should give me some feedback on this: "The Gravel Road"
i want to know what everyone thinks
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Old 07-28-2010, 03:28 PM   #54 (permalink)
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Nice, def something that sounds good and has a good flow.
thanks a bunch!!!
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Old 07-28-2010, 03:29 PM   #55 (permalink)
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very nice, maybe you could record a demo?


in the meantime you should give me some feedback on this: "The Gravel Road"
i want to know what everyone thinks

I'll need some time for that, and I heard your song, it's really cool loved it!!!
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Old 07-28-2010, 03:56 PM   #56 (permalink)
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I'll need some time for that, and I heard your song, it's really cool loved it!!!
thanks, what about it did you like the most?
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Old 07-28-2010, 03:58 PM   #57 (permalink)
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thanks, what about it did you like the most?

I loved the intro and in my opinion, a song isn't one without the lyrics and the meaning of them are strong, in my opinion. Keep it up!!
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Old 07-28-2010, 09:42 PM   #58 (permalink)
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thank you

i actually submitted it to fatcat records, so having other people saying they like it gives me a little more hope
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Old 07-29-2010, 11:28 AM   #59 (permalink)
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thank you

i actually submitted it to fatcat records, so having other people saying they like it gives me a little more hope

Well, I do hope you good luck!!
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Old 07-29-2010, 04:57 PM   #60 (permalink)
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Default Just felt like writing whatever

I couldn't find anything to write about and i was just so in the mood to share this, it's not big of a deal, so if you like it than that's cool....

I live this life, lying
I die a little everyday, wasting
How could I have missed the signs,
If you were always right in front of me?

All alone was what I feared
All I had ever asked for was you
I used to look up at your eyes
I look down upon my lifeless beloveded

My days seem dreary, in the light
I wish I knew before goodbye was the same as, goodnight
Did you know what your life meant to me
As you saw the blinding light?

All alone was what I feared
All I had ever asked for was you
I used to look up at your eyes
I look down upon my cold love

I see you in my dreams
And I feel you caressing my skin
But when I wake up
The nightmare begins
Because I know you'll broken heart won't ever beat

All alone is what I feared
All I had ever asked for was you
I used to look up at your eyes
I look down upon my lifeless heart

I wish I could lie near you
And I know I will someday
But those days are far away
And I'll abandon all I know for you
Because it's love I feel for you
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