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Old 07-30-2010, 08:22 PM   #61 (permalink)
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I like this one, It's more like I can't explain the song to myself but if I sing it in my head I sort of get a feeling from it
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Old 07-30-2010, 09:15 PM   #62 (permalink)
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I like this one, It's more like I can't explain the song to myself but if I sing it in my head I sort of get a feeling from it
Well I just felt like putting it up because I don't know, I just felt like it and thank you I'm glad you find some kind of feeling
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Old 07-30-2010, 10:07 PM   #63 (permalink)
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haha I get what you mean, sometimes I don't know what to write, so I just put old songs of mine up when it gets like that. Keep up the good work though
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Old 07-31-2010, 10:35 AM   #64 (permalink)
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haha I get what you mean, sometimes I don't know what to write, so I just put old songs of mine up when it gets like that. Keep up the good work though

haha thank you
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Old 08-06-2010, 02:28 AM   #65 (permalink)
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You still are doing good, reminds me that once I get besides a PSP, I need to start a journal... for now, I'm still limited to reading. Gives me some tips in addition to the thread titled for that.
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Old 08-16-2010, 01:31 PM   #66 (permalink)
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I was bitten by every one
Of the lies I wish gone
The toxins reached to my heart
And now it seems we can't be apart

The virus is eating me
It's killing me
I need a cure,
I need the cure
Infected by love that's yours

I'm infected by you
I let you in me
And now I have been infected by you
I can't get rid of what's now me

It's like my vital air
It's something I can't bear
Your love is venomous
Your love is contagious

The disease is eating me
It's killing me
I need a cure,
I need the cure
I've been infected for sure

I'm infected by you
I let you in me
And now I have been infected by you
I can't get rid of what's now me
You're so contagious to me
It's like a disease

For so long I thought something was wrong with me
I found that something was missing in me
I thought it was you
And now I'm addicted to you
I need you now
Or help me find a cure

You're so contagious to me
I'm infected by you
I let you in me
And I have been infected by you
I can't get rid of what's now me
You're so contagious to me
It's like a disease
You're love is contagious
You're contagious

Help me find the cure
To separate me from you
Or just stay with me
Don't make me beg for my life
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Old 08-24-2010, 09:46 PM   #67 (permalink)
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I like it. It has many metaphors (MANY), but it still makes a clear point. I know if I packed with that much, I'd screw up.
I don't really see something to improve/ something wrong, good work.

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Old 09-25-2010, 04:09 PM   #68 (permalink)
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THIS IS A MUST READ THINGY! : This is NOT a song. It's just something I wanted to put up because I have something to say. I don't know why I want to say what I'm saying here, but I feel I should put it up. SO DON'T HATE! Just appreciate....

~ Where will I go? (Dreams) ~

I've slept for so long, but never dreamed
I've slept for so long, I can't remember
who I am, or who I was
But I'm finding out that life isn't forever
And nor was your love

My heart has been turned to ashes
As you were to lie down
Now I ask myself as I lay half awake
"Were you really worth it?"
I don't know

I wait for the pain to ease
I want to know the truth behind your lies
But how can the forever sleeping speak?
Unless you talk in your sleep,
Unless you scream or dream,
I've given up so much for you
I wish I knew why the day turns to night
And the night into day

I too was lost in the world,
But we promised we would be lost together
And now I am lost all by myself
With no one to talk to,
to sing to,
to tell my hopes to,
to wish to dream of,
to confide my secrets to,
to share my love to,
to show life through my eyes to,
to smile at,
to cry to,
to laugh with,
to live by their side.

Now you became a star that mocks me
Now you became the wings that soar above me
Now you became my idol
And I'll never know whether you meant what you said
The night before you left:

"Darling, as I leave this door tonight,
I want you to know
That I do love you
But I don't know if I should
If it would be right for me to be attachted to you
To hold all my purpose in you
For if you are gone, where will I go?"

So the question you asked could never be answered
For you left with my purpose
You tried to not attach yourself to things
To people
You tried to release all bonds

But the truth was,
In the coldest nights without you,
Your arms that once held me tight,
I longed for

I bonded my spirit with you
And now it lies in the ground with you
So the question you asked could never be answered,
And now I am burying my life,
My soul,
My spirit,
My love,
I am burying it all

So the question you asked could never be answered,
And I lie on the ground above you as the rain pours down
So the question you asked could never be answered,
And nor can mine:

"Love, you have told me,
you didn't know if you could be mine,
And you have asked me,
If I go, where will you stay
And now it is you that is gone
By the vanity in of your own hand
So now, Love that was my Life,
Now that you are gone, where will I go?"

I'll find my way around though
It'll be a different ending
I won't ever make that mistake again
Of falling for you
Because you are not mine forever
Like you said you would

So the question you asked can never be answered
Where will I go?
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Old 11-15-2011, 10:58 PM   #69 (permalink)
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I think it is a sad song. Maybe categorized as Emo. I feel sad and lonely when i read the lyrics.
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