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Old 08-03-2009, 03:12 PM   #171 (permalink)
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It seems with this song "muddle puddle" that you just wrote off the top of your head... Which can produce good results, but I don't feel any emotion coming from this song, just tired cliches and angst.
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Old 08-03-2009, 05:02 PM   #172 (permalink)
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Reading this thread, it makes me realize how hard it is to be a good songwriter. Trying to be new and creative while not being ridiculous at the same time. It's a tough job to do alright.

Sadly, on the generic **** gets promoted in the mainstream music industry anyways. To promote healthy growth of lyrics, it's best if you stick to the evolution of your own ideals, I'd say. That way, even if the lyrics aren't cutting edge, they can stay organically true. That way, they'll be at least better than ****.
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Old 08-06-2009, 07:03 AM   #173 (permalink)
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Default mean streak

She is prowling around waiting for me to fall
i can smell blood it's my blood on her breath
no matter what i say it's clear in her head
that i am the problem and i have to dissapear.
She never reveals truely what she means
she holds back and thats what bugs me
from time to time she leaves me alone
thats when i'm happy at work and at home.

The biggest issue is money
haven't got enough truely
kind of broke financially
I work full time what does she want from me.

She's bitter and twisted and hides it from everyone
she doesn't realise that everyone knows
she goes out of her way stirring trouble as she goes
only to find that she's still miserable, you are what you sow.
She's got fingers in every pie
when she recieves trouble she wonders why
then she thinks everyone is against her
making it impossible when working with her.

The second issue is power and authority
a bad word from her comes naturally
she's not happy with anyone it's a mystery
and if she has anything at all to do with it, you will be history.
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Old 08-07-2009, 01:50 PM   #174 (permalink)
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Default one two

Interupted by bad news
hurtling towards me out of the blue
shook my whole foundation
and i have no idea what to do.
Yes i'm a little stressed, have no time to rest.

thoughtlessness on my part
really blew me away, thought i was proffessional
i'm not having a great day.

Stand and be strong play a game of bluff,
hope i'l still be standing when they have all had enough.
viscious and unrelentless in there persuit of me
i'm just waiting to be, only a part of history.

threats are easy there easy to control
though promises are deadly, and my death will follow.
From ordinary people with tendancies to push and shove
never knowing one's self or knowing the definition of love.

Life is for living and learning to better one's self
though many people place that thought on a shelf
never to be looked upon through there whole lives
thinking that they can fool me , i won't see through there disguise.

What stupidity from my side and theres
to think and to trust people that really don't care
sharing life stories making bonds
only to find out there creating a bomb
shatter your whole existance, without a blink of an eye
knowing that if they push you, you will surely die.

No mercy, they have hunger for my blood,
i'm face down dying in the mud.
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Old 08-09-2009, 04:13 PM   #175 (permalink)
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Default baptism

When the sun goes down, you are with me
your warm tender touch is so inviting
Everyday with you is a miracle
and miracles walk hand in hand with you.
You have the power to raise the dead
i was going no place, i'd lost my head
You released me from my shackles and chains,
giving me a purpose to live again.

I say to all those who opose me
I stand in the victory
I bow down to no man
In victory i stand.

A war is raging through out the land
have you a miracle holding your hand.
Standing for what's right at all cost,
I am the shepherd for all you who are lost.
For all you who need to see miracles
your time will surely come
the heavenly sound of trumpets can be heard
ready for battle against the evil one.
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Old 08-16-2009, 12:20 PM   #176 (permalink)
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Default little pig

Every time i plead for more
I hear you knocking at my door
telling me i need nothing at all
so whats all of this crying for....

Wish i could believe, wish i could believe,
rubbing my sore eyes, with my hankercheif
feeling kind of silly feeling kind of sad
knowing that you love me even when i'm bad
whats the use iv'e always, been the same
always wanting something and you put me to shame.
A never ending story in which i take the lead
following my head, down the path of greed.chorus:

Back to the book thats where the answers lie
just can't be bothered why should i try
spent so much time already, reading the word
I know you are listening but am i really heard.
In the gutter down the line
explain yourself, how am i fine.
I'm working nights, and days
and you know i don't see my monthly wage
it's all taken from me in several ways
in a pickle in a daze.chorus:

I am still out there free as a bird
I have free will, so stop being obsurd
My favourite word is no, yes isn't a word i use
I'm so used to being everyday abused.
Its not that i am not gratefull what your trying to do
i'm just sick and tired, crapping in the same old loo.chorus:

I'm asking a question, thats not worthy of an answer
so i will carry on stewing on my lot
pretending like my father, that everything i need iv'e got.
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Old 08-19-2009, 12:23 PM   #177 (permalink)
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Default eclipse

Forgotten a touch lost by man
the past though is not forgotten by me
the past and the present goes hand in hand
still holding on to vital keys.
Tremendous waves of light,
gleam across the earth
giving one hope like a new birth.
Life is like a reel of cotton
patching up the way then forgotten.
Truth is with the beholder
in the centre of two hearts in the midst of lovers.

All will be discovered in time
all will be revealed and written in a ryme
nothing will be hidden anymore
everything will be seen no hidden doors.

The flame the fire, cleansing thy soul
refreshing, rapidly down below
believing is knowing, what is to come
you speak of truths, now do your sums.

The years add up, piles on
grey hairs appear and a bulging tum
A little slower thinking and doing
and all you get, for your trouble is a shoeing.
Don't look at me i'm living in a higher existance
you can't steal from me when there's no resistance
your days are numbered through and through
and theres only one thing left to do
write a will, do a kill, yourself, or someone else
am i bothered i'm looking the other way
it's all a blurr in this purple haze.
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Old 08-20-2009, 11:39 AM   #178 (permalink)
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Default who are you

Jump into the mind of a mad man
frill seeking in the darkest corners of his mind
the law inside is broken, your brain and his will fry
throw yourself both feet first, into the depths of hell
living insanely, the twin you had won't tell.

Sell your body and soul, wait for the highest bid
they will take it for free, after opening your lid
smash those hypocrits in the mouth
if you get a chance before your dragged down
wacked and unable to swim
binded by rope limb from limb
blood your blood running out of your veins
frustration confusion life wasteing away
trouble i swear by all that i am
do it now while you can.

The devil riding on a sweep stake
riding at the back it's not his mistake
you being far out way from home
he'l cut you to peices then some.

Wheres the party wheres the babes
he laughs and reply's your in the wrong domain
pain and suffering is all your learn to know
my name is master in my world of woe
What did you expect from the king of lies
did you believe you would recieve, 72 virgin wives.
Your soul is mine thats as good as it gets
do you feel cheated, don't be! i won the bet.
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Old 08-22-2009, 01:57 AM   #179 (permalink)
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Believing is recieving, valuable commodity
influences sharpening one's mind
Trends forever changing, clothes and footwear
a little added extra from the last time
Not partically different, what i would say new
just the samo with a added ribbon or two.

All is new from the eye of the beholder
gaining strengh and character
pleasure and pride immence satisfaction
building one's own platform, reaching a sky.

Protected within a force, sexy and true
turn i am the new age, a new form, what about you.

Changes a hope of something new
my world is open in full view
hurtling towards a new beginning
in this new world i'm the one winning.
Come join me and watch me elavate
to a new form a new state.
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Old 08-24-2009, 12:30 PM   #180 (permalink)
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man, you just churn out these songs like they're nothing. O.o

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