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Old 02-20-2009, 04:23 PM   #11 (permalink)
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very deep i like it .
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Old 02-20-2009, 05:44 PM   #12 (permalink)
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Default I Don't Wanna See Your Face

Turn away from me
I don't wanna see your face
Run away from me my life's worth s***
But what can I do 'bout that?

Leave me be
don't wanna see your face
Feel the desolation
Indifference and yet I care

Look in a mirror, Medusa
Turn yourself to stone if you can
Let me live my life without your
looming shadow over me

I didn't mean to wrong you
Now i just want escape
Release your hold that's over me
And let me still fly free

I don't wanna see your face
or all the farce and crap it brings
Don't wanna see your face
or all the misery

'Cause i feel pain
A cold dry wind
The fingertips are
brushing on my skin

And I get chills
To hear your name
the whispers in a
dark and dreary room

And i don't wanna see your face
The face of the broken
The face of the dead
The face of all who burn in hell

The anger is controlling me
So i don't wanna see your face
or think about the adverse effects
you speaking has on me

Leave me the hell alone
I don't wanna talk to you
I don't wanna see your face
just let me go and get on with my life
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Old 02-21-2009, 12:56 AM   #13 (permalink)
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Old 02-21-2009, 10:44 AM   #14 (permalink)
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I like it a lot better then some of your other stuff. I enjoy things aimed at the world. You should try playing around with perspective, I think you'll enjoy it. Talk from the perspective of mother nature or something.
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Old 02-21-2009, 01:06 PM   #15 (permalink)
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My first poem. odd. to borrow a quote, "a slightly MORE depressing poem?"
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I have nothing to say worth hearing
Nothing to do that's worth doing or
that's worth having been done by me

I am a failure
At life, at death
At in between

I have Idle time
To fill with pain
Its better than nothing

I have done nothing in this life
Perhaps the next one will be better
Moving on, looking forward

Looking up or looking down
Wherever this world takes me
I am a failure put me out of your mind

Come in last in a marathon
Trip over your feet while standing still
I failed to succeed I succeeded to fail

Moving on, looking forward
Perhaps the next one will be better
Perhaps I'll get what I deserve

I deserve nothing
I have nothing to say worth hearing
I have done nothing that's worth being done

I am a failure
Forever and always
And I have achieved nothing

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Old 02-21-2009, 01:15 PM   #16 (permalink)
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your right. it is VERY cliche. I'll go back and change that. and I'll shorten it just a tad
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Old 02-21-2009, 01:23 PM   #17 (permalink)
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Default Agony [revised version if anyone cares]

Agony
its taking away the best of me
Throwing me away
No knife across my wrist
just plain old pain i know Your

Beautiful
I saw the day I met you I would
fall for you
But maybe not today

I see it clearly now
Don't want what i can have
I see it clearly now
What stands in front of me

Agony
its ripping apart me
Leaving chills across my spine
Throwing me into the pits of hell This

Jealousy
why does it still exist?
I see your name possessive and
insane I am

Therapy
am I disturbed or just insane
just tell me now
the anger, death, and lust will stay but

Agony is able to decide
I'm just not worth it anymore
Broken beyond reason beyond
any possible stability

She loves me still and yet he
Loves me still
but I hate myself still
So where can I now turn?

Drown the flesh in water so the devils finally die

Agony
stay the hell away from me
Let the drugs the knife, the drinks still come
Leave me to my pain and all its f***ing side effects

Taking me away, you can
save me from the pain it brings
save me from the death it brings
save me from this Agony
your saving cup can do it all my pastor says

Agony is able to decide
Agony is able to decide
Agony is able to decide that I'm not worth it anymore
Broken beyond reason beyond pain
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Old 02-21-2009, 01:50 PM   #18 (permalink)
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Don't start a new thread just because you changed a couple of lines.
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Old 02-21-2009, 05:43 PM   #19 (permalink)
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I really enjoyed this, there were a few parts that I weren't sure about, but the uncertainty of it sort of adds to it, if you get what I mean. Good Job!
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Old 02-21-2009, 06:07 PM   #20 (permalink)
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angsta'
that just made my day.

And to the OP, All I'm going to say is that I have more sympathy for the person the speaker (I'm assuming is you) is yelling at..
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