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Old 02-26-2009, 08:47 AM   #81 (permalink)
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Old 02-26-2009, 08:49 AM   #82 (permalink)
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hmmmmm... I honestly don't know.
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Old 02-26-2009, 08:56 AM   #83 (permalink)
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now the world has gone to bed
darkness wont engulf my head
i can see by infrared
how i hate the night

(pausing to gather the artistic and emotional strength to tackle the next verse)

now i lay me down to sleep
try to count electric sheep
sweet dream wishes you can keep
how i hate the night

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Old 02-26-2009, 09:10 AM   #84 (permalink)
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hmmmmm... I honestly don't know.
Maybe you should stop. Or start reading dude, because this is some seriously trite shit. Poetry is supposed to be at least a little challenging.
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Old 02-26-2009, 12:12 PM   #85 (permalink)
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hmmmmm... I honestly don't know.
Read some poetry. At least some Federico García Lorca or e. e. cummings or something.
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Old 02-26-2009, 12:39 PM   #86 (permalink)
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I think it would be nice instead of writing 20 mediocre ones, you save all those ideas and merge them into one average one.
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Old 02-26-2009, 01:06 PM   #87 (permalink)
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Greatest Poems Ever Written, Famous Poems, Great Poems, Best Poems
There, go read soemthing good.

Maybe you should look-up some Sylvia Plath, she uses perspective really well. Emily ****enson has great use of irony. Robert Frost, or anyone on the above list. I didn't read all of these, but if your going to post 20,000 poems a day you should at least understand what aspects of it actually make it poetry.

Here, touch-up on your poetic techniques.
Poetry Writing Techniques, Poetic Tips, Poem Techniques
Why don't you try using rhyme to actually enhance the meaning of your poetry instead of put limits on it in your next one? Or forget rhyme completely, I personally hate it. Use rythm, use meter, incorporate the flow into the mood. Try using subtlety, imply a point instead of saying it. Try using diction, take advantage of a words connotation- choose words that mean exactly what you mean. I'm not saying master poetry, I'm far far far from it, but at the least understand it. For the love of god!

At least read this! Poetry Writing Techniques, Poetic Tips, Poem Techniques
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Old 02-26-2009, 01:25 PM   #88 (permalink)
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I think your goal should be to write a poem that isn't easily understood the very first time you read it, means something, and uses poetic some poetic techniques. Try spending three hours on a really good poem instead of twenty or thirty minutes on a crappy one. No offense.
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Old 02-26-2009, 02:38 PM   #89 (permalink)
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And by all means, read Rainer Maria Rilke's Letters to a young poet.
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Old 02-26-2009, 02:40 PM   #90 (permalink)
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I think it would be nice instead of writing 20 mediocre ones, you save all those ideas and merge them into one average one.
This is called John Frusciante syndrome.

Also, rhyming is something only the very great, and the very terrible do. On your climb to the former, under no circumstance should you rhyme. It is the dark side of poetry, and its seductive, but it will destroy you.
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