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06-19-2013, 06:54 AM | #1 (permalink) |
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Join Date: Jun 2013
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Advice and critique for lyrics
Hi, I'm new to the website and as the title says, I appreciate any critique you may give me for my lyrics and any advice given are welcome since I want to improve my skills in lyrics writing anyway here goes, the song is called "Lights Out"
(Verse) What a mess What a mistake I've made for always thinking you felt the same Oh what a shame to be honest I'd rather be alone than take your awful tone don't want to hurt anymore don't want to expect anymore (Pre-chorus) When did we drift apart? Weren't we there from the start? Well I'm not so sure But I now know that for sure that the (Chorus) Lights are out In our young hearts The feelings we have is now dead and gone So I guess this will be goodbye Let's move on with our lives Because the love we had is gone Lights out This isn't complete yet but I want to see if I'm making good progress with the song. Thank you for taking the time to read this |
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