|04-03-2009, 08:50 PM||#41 (permalink)|
Registered Jimmy Rustler
Join Date: Sep 2007
I like it. Now I think you should change the mediocre member to slightly above average member
*Best chance of losing virginity is in prison crew*
*Always Checks Credentials Crew*
*nba > nfl crew*
*Shave one of my legs to pretend its a girl in my bed crew*
*Flakes on Dates to go Hoop crew*
Power: Yamaha Rx-v363
Speakers:2 Boston Acoustics A100's, 2 Pioneer HPM-60's
Headphones: Audio Technica M50, Sony MDR-XB500
|04-19-2009, 07:51 PM||#46 (permalink)|
Join Date: Oct 2007
open up and receive
the crackling of cardboard vessels
pulmonary and pure.
wiffle ball functioneer
of oxygen withdrawal.
doppelgängered from Han Solo mold
and so is sewn, the smiles of the bold
a ragtag firefly militia
to be massacred in the backyard
by jar armed juveniles.
exotic golden glow
by the instruments of innocence.
|04-20-2009, 06:23 PM||#47 (permalink)|
Join Date: Apr 2009
The second paragraph has no flow at all. I am sorry but those lyrics cannot be sung.
Even if it was poetry, it still lacks anything that would deem it so. It seems more like a cruddy letter written to someone.
But, whatever, to each his own.
|04-20-2009, 08:17 PM||#49 (permalink)|
Join Date: Dec 2003
|04-21-2009, 07:03 AM||#50 (permalink)|
you know what it is
Join Date: Mar 2008