darkcornerinthecloset's Songwriting Journal

deep_and_depressing · 03-19-2009, 08:15 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by darkcornerinthecloset

thank you, but although it is first person it is not my perspective; it is someone i know.

Do I happen to know this person?

darkcornerinthecloset · 03-19-2009, 06:19 PM

nope. and its not you. unless it applies. . .? well, if it does than that just means its a good poem; the reader can connect with it

darkcornerinthecloset · 03-19-2009, 06:36 PM

i just wrote this an hour ago, and i havent had a chance to edit it or anything yet, but im in a pissy mood and i need to express it in "healthy" ways, or so says my mother. wouldnt want to disobey the tyrant
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more than sibling rivalry

I won't forgive though I may forget
all the **** you've put me through
And it's all out of spite
but I'm spiteful, too
You only see how much I loath you
but you don't see the passion
the underlying fear
But I will never let you see me cry
I dreamed last night about you
A gun to your head
A dagger through your chest
I just want to see you die
I remember big things
and most of the little ones
You chased me with a knife, once
and a board with nails
With your fists always flying
and your face red with rage
Kicking me while I was down
So I have no qualms to do this now
I remember his biased paternal love
because you were just like him
You like the same things
You looked like him, too
And I remember how he always sided with you
How he would send me away
And how you would whisper insults at my back
or bang on my closed door as you walked by
So I have no qualms to do this now
I want to see you dead
I want to see your ****ing disembodied head
and I don't care about the consequences
or about what people say
because all I want is to run away
because what you have done is a knife in my chest
it has scarred me for life
But I will never let you see me cry
I would rather die

Magicevil · 03-19-2009, 08:07 PM

Oh my god i think im gonna hurl

Schizotypic · 03-20-2009, 12:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Magicevil

Oh my god i think im gonna hurl

What he said.

darkcornerinthecloset · 03-21-2009, 08:09 PM

thank you. with sarcasm

Alfred · 03-21-2009, 08:18 PM

Big thank you to the mod who did this.

darkcornerinthecloset · 04-13-2009, 07:10 PM

i havent written anything lately, because my life was going all hunky-dory recently. but some things never change
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November

And the asphalt tongues stretching toward forever.
And I don't know where I'm going.
Winter lasts longer
in case you haven't heard.
The slush is sliding around
and around
and the sleet is blocking my view
of the countryside.
And so I'm waiting for the weather to change.
I've spent months waiting for the goddamn seasons to change.
Did ya know
winter lasts longer?
Right now I'm trapped in November.
And I spent the whole goddamn year
waiting for June

03-19-2009, 06:19 PM	#142 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	nope. and its not you. unless it applies. . .? well, if it does than that just means its a good poem; the reader can connect with it __________________ If you board the wrong train, it is no use running along the corridor in the other direction.

03-19-2009, 06:36 PM	#143 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	murdorous poem? i just wrote this an hour ago, and i havent had a chance to edit it or anything yet, but im in a pissy mood and i need to express it in "healthy" ways, or so says my mother. wouldnt want to disobey the tyrant ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ more than sibling rivalry I won't forgive though I may forget all the ** you've put me through And it's all out of spite but I'm spiteful, too You only see how much I loath you but you don't see the passion the underlying fear But I will never let you see me cry I dreamed last night about you A gun to your head A dagger through your chest I just want to see you die I remember big things and most of the little ones You chased me with a knife, once and a board with nails With your fists always flying and your face red with rage Kicking me while I was down So I have no qualms to do this now I remember his biased paternal love because you were just like him You like the same things You looked like him, too And I remember how he always sided with you How he would send me away And how you would whisper insults at my back or bang on my closed door as you walked by So I have no qualms to do this now I want to see you dead I want to see your **ing disembodied head and I don't care about the consequences or about what people say because all I want is to run away because what you have done is a knife in my chest it has scarred me for life But I will never let you see me cry I would rather die __________________ If you board the wrong train, it is no use running along the corridor in the other direction.

03-21-2009, 08:09 PM	#146 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	thank you. with sarcasm __________________ If you board the wrong train, it is no use running along the corridor in the other direction.

03-21-2009, 08:18 PM	#147 (permalink)
Alfred one big soul Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Canada Posts: 5,096	Big thank you to the mod who did this. __________________ LAST.FM / VINYL COLLECTION / RYM

04-13-2009, 07:10 PM	#148 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	wrote again i havent written anything lately, because my life was going all hunky-dory recently. but some things never change ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ November And the asphalt tongues stretching toward forever. And I don't know where I'm going. Winter lasts longer in case you haven't heard. The slush is sliding around and around and the sleet is blocking my view of the countryside. And so I'm waiting for the weather to change. I've spent months waiting for the goddamn seasons to change. Did ya know winter lasts longer? Right now I'm trapped in November. And I spent the whole goddamn year waiting for June __________________ If you board the wrong train, it is no use running along the corridor in the other direction.

03-19-2009, 08:07 PM	#144 (permalink)
Magicevil Groupie Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 1	Oh my god i think im gonna hurl