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09-03-2009, 06:11 PM
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did you click the "Vote For Me" Button on the website?
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10-07-2009, 11:05 PM
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Battlefield
I currently have just a chorus but it's coming along
on the battlefieldIdeas, tips, comments, love, hate?
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10-08-2009, 10:45 AM
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One comment: when I imagine a battlefield, I don't imagine anyone waiting. On the *way* to the battlefield, people may be waiting for or eager for blood. Once on the battlefield, I imagine people actively hungering for blood and slaughtering others to make their blood flow. "Waiting" sounds very passive. Second comment: Humans are actually quite a bit like packs of dogs, only scarier. I would say humans are worse than dogs.
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10-08-2009, 02:13 PM
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young gun funyun
Join Date: May 2009
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peace, -nick
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12-08-2009, 03:35 PM
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have any of you heard of filter magazine? probably
well they're having this clip contest (in voting period) and i submitted, so check them out and maybe (PLEASE!!!) vote for me... Flurry - Jake Hansen's Filter Magazine Clips Challenge Submission - Indaba Music R&B song without losing my style Silver Tears - Jake Hansen's Filter Magazine Clips Challenge Submission - Indaba Music House song, so unique to what i usually do, i made an entirely new project Shades of Maroon Cloud - Jake Hansen's Filter Magazine Clips Challenge Submission - Indaba Music after making it it reminded me of volcano choir, except not as good Patricia - Jake Hansen's Filter Magazine Clips Challenge Submission - Indaba Music Emo house song, under Shades of Maroon name the links are not the same
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12-22-2009, 10:47 PM
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i'm releasing a new full-length (self-titled) album
it will be on itunes next week more info tomorrow.
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07-07-2010, 10:00 AM
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holy crap it's been forever since i've used this thread i literally have over 50 songlyrics that've never been posted here
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07-16-2010, 07:58 PM
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"Saviour"
take it all away from me
i can't stand the sight of this the movements are so out of mind and i'm just too aligned oh my dear i'm lost in the woods oh my love i've got no signal i've got no compass to point me home but i hear you from around the bend oh my dear i'm lost in the woods oh my love i've got no signal (oh thank go, oh thank god you found me) may i lay in your arms i almost gave up i'm so glad you found me you are no god but you're my saviour
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07-21-2010, 01:48 PM
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I really like it as a piece of poetry, but I think it is a little too much "pure poetry" for a song. Poetry lets your mind fill in the empty blanks, but song writing needs a little more information in between to help it flow. For example (We cross our hands, a shadowy figure) I think there is too big of a gap in between the subject matter. A way to make it flow better could go something like this.....As we crossed hands we gazed upon cascading shadows lit by the amber sun. Thats just off the top of my head but I'm not trying to criticize, just trying to open your mind a little bit.
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