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Old 07-14-2009, 03:41 PM   #91 (permalink)
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well, i'm recording inside, so the rain sound is muffled by my house
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Old 07-20-2009, 01:45 PM   #92 (permalink)
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I'll settle for your myspace, didn't see that earlier. :o Sounds a bit like 'The National' only not quite as polished. Still pretty impressive that a teenager could make somethin' with a bit o' class n' taste either way. Keep makin' music.

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Old 08-02-2009, 06:44 PM   #93 (permalink)
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Default Pretty Lights

Pretty Lights
Pass me by
Every time
I sigh

Show the way
For this new day
And we’ll survive
In pretty lights

Broken rag doll
Beautiful kid
The mother died
In pretty lights

Grand forest blues
Older than you
Took them down
Destroyed our town
In pretty lights

My best friend
Lost his way
Went down the road
Into darkness
Broken by
Those Pretty lights


I'll Try to upload a demo of this sometime this week
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Old 08-08-2009, 01:16 PM   #94 (permalink)
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Actually, quite a nice idea here--you manage to say only what you need to say with a few words. My biggest issue is with the overuse of the words "Pretty Lights"--If you really desire to have that in there, you could change the adjective to something a little bit darker each time.

i.e. (and don't use this example, it's a bad one)
'enticing lights' (could even say 'ticing lights--still makes sense when said)
'waning lights'
'(could repeat pretty lights one more time)
'darkened heights' (normally, heights being interchangeable with cliffs or chasms)

Take my advice at your own will,
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Old 08-09-2009, 01:56 PM   #95 (permalink)
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I agree with Nick here, "pretty lights" loses it's effect... I understand the idea for repetition, but I feel it needs to be more subtle here... Try making the adjective in place of "Pretty" match the feel of the verse... For example, keep "pretty" for the first, but maybe for the verse "Show me the way/through the day/ and we'll survive/ in pretty* lights
*Instead try Guiding, or Wayward, etc.
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Old 08-14-2009, 03:32 PM   #96 (permalink)
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Default Some Remixes For Ya (no.1)

The Postal Service - Such Great Heights (Stone Birds Remix) DOWNLOAD
This Song's Last.FM Page

Apple Eyes - Wild Beasts (Stone Birds Remix) DOWNLOAD
This Song's Last.FM Page

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Old 08-14-2009, 06:23 PM   #97 (permalink)
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Hi Stone Birds,

I listened to both of your remixes and then the originals, which I'd never heard before, so I could compare them.

I recommend you make the vocals louder for both remixes, if that is possible. It was harder for me to hear and understand the words on the remixes than on the originals, so that I couldn't get the meaning as well from the remixes.

In your Wild Beasts remix you played around with shifting the sound somehow for a measure every once in a while, making the song sound thinner, like listening to a tape recording. This sudden, short shift in sound quality made me start to think more about the shift in sound quality than in the music, so my preference would be to have a longer shift in sound quality rather than sudden short ones.

Thanks for sharing the remixes! It is interesting to hear different versions of the songs.
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Old 08-19-2009, 05:44 PM   #98 (permalink)
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Hi Stone Birds,

I listened to both of your remixes and then the originals, which I'd never heard before, so I could compare them.

I recommend you make the vocals louder for both remixes, if that is possible. It was harder for me to hear and understand the words on the remixes than on the originals, so that I couldn't get the meaning as well from the remixes.

In your Wild Beasts remix you played around with shifting the sound somehow for a measure every once in a while, making the song sound thinner, like listening to a tape recording. This sudden, short shift in sound quality made me start to think more about the shift in sound quality than in the music, so my preference would be to have a longer shift in sound quality rather than sudden short ones.

Thanks for sharing the remixes! It is interesting to hear different versions of the songs.
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Here's a few i have planned for the next one
The Sounds - Beatbox
Rivers Cuomo - My Brain Is Working Overtime


if you guys have any songs you think i should remix then by all means tell me
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The Sounds - Beatbox (Stone Birds Remix) VOTE FOR ME!!!
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Old 09-03-2009, 06:02 PM   #100 (permalink)
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