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Old 05-13-2009, 02:16 AM   #21 (permalink)
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I'd stick with "secretion " if I were you. "
"Excretion" for example wouldn't convey quite the same mood.
Great advice.
Would you like to change her first two words to Colostamy Bag while you're at it?
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Old 05-13-2009, 03:03 AM   #22 (permalink)
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reminds me a little of the lyrics to Winter Birds by Ray LaMontagne. Beautiful song:

It's the Widow now that owns that angry plow,
The spartan Mule and The Crippled Cow
The fallow field that will yield no more,
As the fox lay sleeping beneath her kitchen floor

The stream can't contain such the withering rain,
And from the pasture the fence it is leaning away
The clouds crack and growl
Like some great cat on the prowl
Crying out, "I am, I am" over and over again

The days grow short
As the nights grow long
The kettle sings its tortured song
As many petalled kiss I place upon her brow,
Oh, my lady, Lady I am loving you now

The winter birds have come back again,
Here the sprightly Chickadee
Gone now is the Willow Wren
In passing greet each other as if old, old friends
And to the voiceless trees
It is their own they will lend

The days grow short
As the nights grow long
The kettle sings its tortured song
As many petalled kiss I place upon her brow,
Oh, my lady, Lady I am loving you now

And though all these things will change,
The memories will remain
As green to gold, and gold to brown
The leaves will fall to feed the ground
And in their falling, make no sound

Oh my lady,
Lady I am loving you now

I've gathered all my money and I'm goin' to town,
To buy my lady a long and flowing gown
'Cause come tomorrow morning
We're off to the county fair
I'll find a yellow flower
And I will lace it in her hair
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Old 05-15-2009, 06:27 AM   #23 (permalink)
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Old 05-15-2009, 06:31 AM   #24 (permalink)
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Hey, New rules
Hey, they'll see it.

You don't need to post this all over the songwriting forum, thanks.
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Old 05-16-2009, 06:23 AM   #25 (permalink)
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daysleeper, your threads have been merged into one.

Read : http://www.musicbanter.com/song-writ...e-posting.html

Send me or another mod a PM with a link to this thread if you want us to change the name.
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