Dr_Rez

Im not trying to be mean or anything just to be honest. This is filled with so many used cliches. Seeing light and rhyming it with holding tight seems like a super easy way out of a real rhyme. The chorus especially needs some personalization.

I think you are off to a good start and you clearly know how to go about writing a song. BUT keep in mind how many love songs have been written in history. Do you want this to get lost in the masses of democracy?

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