darkcornerinthecloset's Songwriting Journal

Schizotypic · 02-21-2009, 07:35 PM

Okay, Deep&Depressing! I feel like you are writting about experiancing struggle constantly. But, despite your SN, the deeper you go into interpersonal struggle, the more you fearlessly process through, the less depressed you get. I'd try looking inside, try out some other methods of thinking about life, look at your part, change a little, do something durastic, whatever. But I think your poems/songs would have more to them if they were about processing through a strugle then just having it happen to you.
...not that it's really my place to say, but I feel comfortable saying it.

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-21-2009, 08:07 PM

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Originally Posted by Feign

that just made my day.

And to the OP, All I'm going to say is that I have more sympathy for the person the speaker (I'm assuming is you) is yelling at..

who do you think im yelling at? right-track?

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-21-2009, 08:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Schizotypic

Okay, Deep&Depressing! I feel like you are writting about experiancing struggle constantly. But, despite your SN, the deeper you go into interpersonal struggle, the more you fearlessly process through, the less depressed you get. I'd try looking inside, try out some other methods of thinking about life, look at your part, change a little, do something durastic, whatever. But I think your poems/songs would have more to them if they were about processing through a strugle then just having it happen to you.
...not that it's really my place to say, but I feel comfortable saying it.

btw, im not deep and depressing, y did you call me that? though our work can sometimes be similar, cause she used one of my poems in one of her songs

Schizotypic · 02-21-2009, 08:18 PM

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Originally Posted by darkcornerinthecloset

btw, im not deep and depressing, y did you call me that? though our work can sometimes be similar, cause she used one of my poems in one of her songs

Oh, haha, your work is similar. Sorrrrrrrrrrry! My bad, totally my bad. Maybe Deep&depressing will read that at some point, it was aimed at her, but it's alright advise; anyone could use it.

Feign · 02-22-2009, 01:08 AM

This is totally based on personal experience, but somebody close that loved you, but you don't love them back (obviously). Now this is probably completely and utterly wrong, but that's just what I see.

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-22-2009, 08:48 AM

no, actually someone i never met in person but i was reallly angry at cause they kept being a ****

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-22-2009, 02:25 PM

You say my behavior is horrible
My social skills are deplorable
Curse me out for being who I am

You live in a shallow world
Full of shallow people
with many masks to wear

When I don't talk I have nothing to say
Why are you against keeping it that way?
You curse me out for being who I am

You live in a world of pretty people
When somewhere in them is the groaning mass
of who they are in truth

You say I act different when I'm around you
That's because you and me are through
I don't want to be your daughter anymore

Disown me, why don't you?
No, wait, but what would people say?
Gossip and talk is a trivial thing

You want me to be a perfect daughter
a poster child for your maternal slaughter
Where I go you cannot follow

Who I am is someone you don't know
Where I go at night is somewhere you cannot follow
Into my dreams, or something more?

You curse me out for being who I am
But I cannot live in your lifelong sham
I'll escape the moment I turn eighteen

Let me free from this genetic
hold you keep on my life
Let me learn from my own mistakes

A sheltered child goes nowhere in this
cold, dark world
of empty people

You have the nerve to say I, I am two-faced
And that the faces are not pretty
At least they are real and not wrought of Botox and Plastic Surgery

I don't love you
In fact, I don't even LIKE you
In fact, I can barely STAND you

But this is just who I am
Deal with it
You're the one who made me

Feign · 02-22-2009, 04:45 PM

okay, like I said, this was personal experience blinding me from seeing the meaning you're portraying. Sorry ^^

deep_and_depressing · 02-23-2009, 10:43 AM

OMG I love it almost as much as I love you!! haha.

deep_and_depressing · 02-23-2009, 10:50 AM

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Originally Posted by Schizotypic

Oh, haha, your work is similar. Sorrrrrrrrrrry! My bad, totally my bad. Maybe Deep&depressing will read that at some point, it was aimed at her, but it's alright advise; anyone could use it.

ok point taken

02-22-2009, 02:25 PM	#27 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	Who I Am You say my behavior is horrible My social skills are deplorable Curse me out for being who I am You live in a shallow world Full of shallow people with many masks to wear When I don't talk I have nothing to say Why are you against keeping it that way? You curse me out for being who I am You live in a world of pretty people When somewhere in them is the groaning mass of who they are in truth You say I act different when I'm around you That's because you and me are through I don't want to be your daughter anymore Disown me, why don't you? No, wait, but what would people say? Gossip and talk is a trivial thing You want me to be a perfect daughter a poster child for your maternal slaughter Where I go you cannot follow Who I am is someone you don't know Where I go at night is somewhere you cannot follow Into my dreams, or something more? You curse me out for being who I am But I cannot live in your lifelong sham I'll escape the moment I turn eighteen Let me free from this genetic hold you keep on my life Let me learn from my own mistakes A sheltered child goes nowhere in this cold, dark world of empty people You have the nerve to say I, I am two-faced And that the faces are not pretty At least they are real and not wrought of Botox and Plastic Surgery I don't love you In fact, I don't even LIKE you In fact, I can barely STAND you But this is just who I am Deal with it You're the one who made me Last edited by darkcornerinthecloset; 02-22-2009 at 02:35 PM.

02-23-2009, 10:43 AM	#29 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	OMG I love it almost as much as I love you!! haha. __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

02-21-2009, 07:35 PM	#21 (permalink)
Schizotypic Souls of Sound Sailors Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Mojave Posts: 759	Okay, Deep&Depressing! I feel like you are writting about experiancing struggle constantly. But, despite your SN, the deeper you go into interpersonal struggle, the more you fearlessly process through, the less depressed you get. I'd try looking inside, try out some other methods of thinking about life, look at your part, change a little, do something durastic, whatever. But I think your poems/songs would have more to them if they were about processing through a strugle then just having it happen to you. ...not that it's really my place to say, but I feel comfortable saying it.

02-22-2009, 01:08 AM	#25 (permalink)
Feign Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: California Posts: 66	This is totally based on personal experience, but somebody close that loved you, but you don't love them back (obviously). Now this is probably completely and utterly wrong, but that's just what I see.

02-22-2009, 08:48 AM	#26 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	no, actually someone i never met in person but i was reallly angry at cause they kept being a ****

02-22-2009, 04:45 PM	#28 (permalink)
Feign Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: California Posts: 66	okay, like I said, this was personal experience blinding me from seeing the meaning you're portraying. Sorry ^^